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EF#6 – Blind Justice

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“So, how was your date last night?”

Nadia surprised me when I was just walking to the kitchen this morning. I’ve told her that I was going on a date with a woman I met online before. She was a very good-looking woman with her smile and attitude impressions that I got during the chat with her. I walked across Nadia and took a cup of coffee before I told her about the date.

“It was good. I was really happy having that dinner with her last night. She was like what I’ve imagined before.” I sipped my coffee before I continued, “She was really a cheerful woman, the most I’ve ever met, actually.”

“Woww… glad to hear it, Ben. Finally, no more single time.” Nadia seemed so happy hearing my explanation. I was just put a smirk on my face hearing it.

“Unfortunately, it won’t be happening Nad. I decided not to.”

“Why?” Nadia asked with shocked. “You said it yourself that she’s a cheerful woman, the type you really like. And I can imagine that you two are meant to be together, a cheerful woman and a serious accountant.”

“Nothing. I just didn’t feel any chemistry with her.” I sipped another coffee.

My eyes wandered off the windows. My mind went back to last night after the dinner. Julia, the woman I met, told me that she was a prostitute before in order to financed her lifestyle. One thing that I didn’t expect coming from her.

“Hey…. look Ben. This is awful. Read the headline. A blonde haired woman, aged around 35, was found dead in a park. Nailed to a tree. It is dangerous nowadays for a good woman like me to walked at night.”

Picture taken from here
7 Deadly Sins – taken from Comicvine

Nadia gave the newspaper to me. I didn’t need to read it actually. I still remembered clearly when I took her to that tree and nailed her slowly. An avarice’s woman like her deserved to be punished. Just like all seven deadly sinners that I’ve punished before.

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The story above is a pure fiction for this week challenge for BEC, which is “Alter ego“. I was confused how to described an alter ego. But then something came up in my mind, why don’t I make a fiction for this week. So there it is, my first English fiction. Hope you enjoy it. And no… that’s not my alter ego, if you are wondering. If you want to know, perhaps it would be a…. *thinking* *still thinking*. Okay, I’m giving up. I can’t come up with one.

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79 Replies to “EF#6 – Blind Justice”

  1. Well done, Mas Ryan. Great Fiction! 🙂 Never thought to write a fiction for BEC’s challenge before. It could be considered as the next BEC’s challenge hoho

  2. oh my, a psycho?
    what exactly triggered him to kill her? purely because he felt betrayed because she lied?
    he punished sinners? who is he? a saint? a vigilante?

    1. Ah Zy…
      Thank you for your questions.
      He killed her not because of her lies. But because she did one of the 7 deadly sins.
      The logics of why is not there huh? Means need more improvement.

  3. aaah, this week’s topic is kinda hard one to tackle. I was actually thinking to make exactly this kind of fiction too (one that includes a woman being murdered) hehehe but.. well, it’s kinda difficult to tailor a story in such a short time.. hahaha

  4. What a thrilling story, Mas. As far as I can imply, Ben’s alter ego is a serial killer who couldn’t stand the presence of 7 deadly sins in human being. Clever premise. But I do wonder what will be Nadia’s fate if she lives with him? She’s his family, if I’m not mistaken?

    Continuation of this story will be really appreciated. I’m looking forward to your another stories :hihi *nagih*

    1. Yes Gara. You are correct. I didn’t tell much about Nadia. Actually she’s a very good friend of Ben’s and they are roommate.

      Continuation? Hmmm… Will be very hard to do that Gara.

      1. i have no idea what ‘cmiiw’ is. this abbreviation-slang term…i practically have to ask my colleague what ‘cmiiw’ is! i grew up in MIRC era.. where ‘asl’ and ‘lol’ are the most common abbr. ahahha. it’s just rina, by the way….

  5. I’ve thinking to write a fiction again for this challenge but I have not write it yet. The ide still not solid yet. But, well, here you go, Mas. A fiction in English… Well done ^_^/

    1. Thank you Maya. You are the one inspired me to wrote fiction. Hahaha.

      How’s the logic of my fiction May? Need some improvement? Can’t wait to read yours.

      1. Although you are seldom to write fiction, once you made it, you made it well, Mas Ryan. 🙂

        Only some points which perhaps you need to explain further :
        1. The “I” nailed the woman at the tree while he just knowed that the woman was ex prostitute when they were dating. Does he always bring nail everywhere he go?

        2. The reason he killed was because the woman did the prostitutiin which belong to one of 7 deadly sins. Does he punish them at random? Or the one that become close with him.

        Looking forward for your next fiction 🙂

  6. Firstly, thank you for using my name in this story. bhahaha!
    And the story is so simple but twisted! gosh, keren banget :3 Aku belom bisa tuh bikin cerita yg mind-blowing dan nendang kyk gitu, mana singkat lagi ceritanya 😯

    1. Thank you Nadia. I was thinking to link it backed to your blog. But the story is not reflecting you as blogger. Hahaha.

      Makasih ya sekali lagi. Kebanyakan nonton Criminal Mind aku mah

  7. Wow, it’s just..it’s just creepy..
    I cannot say much, but your fiction is good, Mas Ryan 🙂 Such a creative way to fulfill this challenge.

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